tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2779469186880005902.post3772560008258841231..comments2022-11-15T01:01:37.552-08:00Comments on PattisallHumanGeo: Alexander the GreatSarahhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13700679817637265382noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2779469186880005902.post-41158602101928933492011-04-04T11:58:19.615-07:002011-04-04T11:58:19.615-07:00Rephrase this into a coherent thesis statement: &q...Rephrase this into a coherent thesis statement: "Alexander the Great is debatably still known as the greatest ruler the world has ever seen; as a result of, the victories he accomplished, his army, and his love of power." Lose the generalization about him being the "greatest" anything; instead, make something out of the idea of his "love of power". Was that his motivation? And if it was, was it worth it?<br /><br />A major problem throughout this essay is that it basically reads as an encyclopedia article. An academic paper is not an encyclopedia article; rather, an academic essay presents a point-of-view and attempts to back it up.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14091328599818819777noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2779469186880005902.post-82497281316986623272011-03-16T09:02:13.208-07:002011-03-16T09:02:13.208-07:00Well I think you could improve on your thesis and ...Well I think you could improve on your thesis and your introductory paragraph could also be a but longerQuasay Multanihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323797445066397764noreply@blogger.com